Alterretla {{Pretty Much Done... I think}}

[Alterretla]

.:|PC Information|:.

# PC Name: Alterretla, nickname is Alter or Alt

# PC Appearance: Wears a black trench coat that is hemmed with silver fabric; it's usually always open and hangs just below the kneecaps. The wave marking are also silver. His hair is the same style as Haseo, but it's black. He also wears a blindfold, usually relying on Fate, or just plain stupidity, to attack.

# PC Job: Shadow Warlock

# PC Age: 27

# PC Gender: Male

# PC Hair Color: Raven black.

# PC Eye Color: Unknown. ((Is this OK???))

# PC Height: 5' 11"

# PC Weight: 167 lbs

# PC Clothing Style: Although he wears a trench coat, it is usually pretty stiff, so it's more like an open robe. His entire body is symmetrical, like reversed mirror images; even his blindfold knot is a perfectly mirrored image.

# PC Physical Traits: (Optional)

# PC Personality: Rather poetic. Or, if you'd like, cryptic. People would tend to find it annoying.

# Fighting Style: Wait for the enemy to move first and analyze their weaknesses.

# Strengths: Has excellent hearing, and is very talented with his skills.

# Weaknesses: Can easily be tricked if you scramble his hearing.

.:|Weapon Information|:.

# Weapon Name: Immortal Darkness

# Weapon Type: Grimoire

# Weapon Appearance: It's cover is black leather while it's spine is silvery metal. The papyrus that makes up it's pages are written on with black ink, as is tradition. When Alt is reading from it, the spells that are written inside emit a black light. When targeting, the target ring is black instead of red. {{OK???}}

# Weapon Abilities: Poison

(A separate post will be added for spells if you are a Shadow Warlock, Harvest Cleric, or Macabre Dancer.) {{What's it mean by this exactly???}}

.:|Real World Information|:.

# Real Name:Eikiri Imagawa

# Real Appearance: Lonely school boy look; wears dark colored polos, khakis, and glasses.

# Real Occupation: Going for a programming position. Currently still in College and has a job as a bartender.

# Real Age: 27

# Real Gender: Male

# Real Hair Color: Blue, Bed-Head look at all times.

# Real Eye Color: Blue.

# Real Height: 5' 7"

# Real Weight: 148 lbs.

# Real Clothing Style: Schoolboy-ish- Khaki/Dress pants, Polos and Button-Ups, and Glasses.

# Real Physical Traits: (Optional)

# Real Personality: Really quiet. Has no social life at all. His life completely revolves around the Internet.

# Parents: Retired.

# Siblings: None.

# Relatives: Just parents, who live really far.

# History: (optional)

.:|Role Playing Information|:.

italics- real life
regular-The World

Slipping off his shoes, Eikiri went straight to his computer. Pressing the power button, he reminisced on what he'd done so far today: he got up at 11 AM, showered and dressed for school, went to school, was ignored at school, left school for his bar tendering job, finished tendering at 6 PM, went out to eat, got home at about 8 o'clock, and was now logging on as Alterretla.

Stepping forward from Eternal City, Mac Anu's Chaos Gate, Alter opened the door to bridge entrance. Breathing in the fresh, humid air, he wondered when the wind to blow him to his next adventure. His favorite grimoire at hand, Immortal Darkness, Alt stepped forth into the sprawling city of Mac Anu.


{{How was it???}}

[Chaos]

Ok, first off You need to put in more description for both your PC and his real world counter part. Also please put in eye colour seeing as that is a main part of appearance and elaborate more on your clothing style for both. Personality is also pretty vague along with your fighting style, strengths and weaknesses.

If you have any questions feel free to ask and I'll try to help.

[Saiketsu Temagi]

Repeat what Chaos has stated. I'll inow show ways to improve on those.

As far as strength and weakness, elaborate on them, such as stating the obvious weaknesses of a class your using. I with my Adept rogue and my harvest cleric stated poor defense, lack of ability to gain skill levels quickly.

Fightiong style, break it inot a few parts like this

close-Range, He uses swift and conservative steps to avoid a blade before pushing his opponent aside with his book. Or maybe strange ways of spell placement.
I have a harvest cleric, and I beleivwe we have another named Yuki o you could check them botth for some help on this since it's somewhat the same.

On the rest it's mostly just a need of more info on how they look act and fell about things.